I’m so lonesome I could cry – Hank Williams

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Did you ever see a robin weep
When leaves began to die?
That means he’s lost the will to live
I’m so lonesome I could cry

She stares out the window
he drinks a second cup of coffee
says, that was good, heads to the office.
She wonders that love can be so cozy
as she clears breakfast from the table
questions how she’ll be able to make
it through the day,
that empty place in her heart…
she’s coming apart.

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21 responses to “I’m so lonesome I could cry – Hank Williams

  1. Oh that loneliness – to be there in the remains. I could easily have see this work with “the ballad of Lucy Jordan” too.

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  2. What Mama Zen said. The sadness is thick as blood in the heart of this speaker. The idea of living in a full heart, but completely alone is one that breaks the soul in two.

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  3. That emptiness that is part of our lives from time to time…poignant.

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  4. “I asked Hank Williams ‘how lonely does it get?’ Hank Williams hasn’t answered yet.” –Leonard Cohen

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  5. The last line is a stunner.

    Much love…

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  6. Kerry O'Connor

    You present so perfectly, the phenomenon of loneliness, even when one is not actually alone. It is a state that not every person can understand and describe in simple yet effective terms.

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  7. Songs are popular — nail us — because we already know them so well. Or teach us what to feel when we get there. Anyway, you nailed it.

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  8. The worst loneliness is that one we endure with someone else. You paint it well. This song, his voice, is the very essence of sadness.

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  9. Super sad, and wonderful to fit a story into the 55 words. Thanks. k.

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  10. The vast distance between his statement (that was good) and her intensely heart-wrenching questions….ooh, wow….such a powerful nod to the disconnect that feeds her loneliness. Very superbly written, Debi 🙂

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  11. It’s utterly heartbreaking when love gets lost to the mundane but necessary working-gears of this societalized life. Love your poem, Debi.

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  12. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    Oh yes, Hank Williams – with that song in particular – is a real tear-jerker! I like what you have done, putting the loneliness in that domestic context (often the backdrop for his songs, too) and the quiet build-up you use.

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  13. This simple details make the emptiness palpable.

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  14. Oh yeah that is some kinda loneliness and such a deep sadness.

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  15. This reminds me of a friend going through a divorce. The loneliness scuttling around what should be the picture of a normal life can drive a person mad.

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